Reading and Writing Rocks Yellow / Lesson 6: Using Details to Explain in Writing
Example of how you can start with a general statement, but use detail sentences to back up the
general statement to tell the story: See next slide
The Crow Indians had stolen some Sioux horses.
Slow had jabbed the Crow with his stick.
He no longer seemed so slow and serious.
He did have a slow and serious nature though.
It was considered braver to push an enemy off of a horse than to shoot an arrow from far away.
Slow had acted bravely
They had won the battle.
Stories are more interesting when they put the reader in the place that they are reading about.
Example 2 (Details): Sara Longhorn went to the Majestic waterfall park to read her favorite mystery
Example 1 does not give the reader a picture of what the park looks like, but example 2 does, and
the reader also learns what type of person Sara is and what she is doing in the park in sentence 2.
Details provide pictures for readers or audiences to see the bigger picture of what is going on.
If a writer uses too many details, then the point or message may be lost in the details
However, without details, it would be difficult to gain the full perspective or understanding of the
Here are some types of words that can help you create a story with details in it:
Hardworking, comfortable, picturesque, colors, smells, tastes, feelings, descriptions, places, sights,
numbers, sounds, etc.